In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, in many

countries

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young

people

are overconfident because many

children

eating fast

food

and

energy

drinking at school or street every

day

and

also

this

condition increasing

year

by

year

. I think that

the

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apply

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ourselves has the responsibility

this

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for this

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issue.

Furthermore

, many young

humans

eating

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eat

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junk

food

each

day

. So,

this

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this child

these children

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children

becoming unhealthy and

overconfidient

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overconfident

and

also

government

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the government

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should

has

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have

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the to solve these issues. Because, if

government

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the government

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forbide

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forbids

forbid

forbade

this

fast

food

after some kids do not buy

junk

food

and

energy

drink

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drinks

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.

Moreover

,

government

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the government

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must sanction a lot of

event

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events

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also

many

people

believe that

the

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apply

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society has

of

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apply

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the

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a

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duty.

For instance

, if one child

energy

drink

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drinks

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each

day

.

As a result

,

this

kid might be ill or unhealthy in the near future. From one perspective,many

children

would consume

junk

food

and

this

problem

extremely

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bad for some young

people

.

In addition

,

to

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apply

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these

issues

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issues,

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ourselves to solve because many marketing

buy

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buys

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a lot of fast

food

.

Besides

that,

children

are becoming overweight

year

by

year

also

children

think

government

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the government

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must

has

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have

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the to solve

this

problem but I think should

to

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apply

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resolve

this

issue.

For example

, I

am eating

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eat

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fast

food

every month because my

sibling

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siblings

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are responsibility

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responsibility

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responsible

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me

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for me

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. In my opinion, some young

humans

need

of

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apply

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their sibling responsibility. In conclusion,most

humans

eating

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eat

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junk

food

and

energy

drink

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drinks

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.

As a result

, many

people

be

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are

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unhealthy and weight

day

by

day

. I think do not consume several meals

such

as

this

meals

junk

food

and fast

food

.

Humans

should themselves responsible

to solve

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for solving

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this

problem.