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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee ad tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee ad tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
coffee
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-and-tea buying and drinking preferences of
people
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 in five Australian cities. It compares the proportion of residents who brought fresh or
instant
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coffee
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, and those who went to the cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4 weeks.
It is clear that
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 most
people
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 choose a more convenient way of
drink
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,
such
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 as going to a cafe or buying
instant
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coffee
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instead
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 of making their own
drink
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 (fresh
coffee
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).
According to
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 the chart, over 60% of inhabitants in Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney went to cafes for
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 or tea and around 55% in Brisbane. These numbers are much higher than those of buying fresh or
instant
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coffee
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. Adelaide is an exception with slightly less than
half
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 of its
people
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 going
half
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,
also
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 one or two per cent lower than buying
instant
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coffee
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. Among those who bought
coffee
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, around
half
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 (45% - 55%) of
people
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 in the cities bought
instant
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coffee
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.
In contrast
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, fewer
people
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 brought fresh
coffee
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 though the different variability: the proportion in Sydney and Melbourne was almost the same as the figure for those who brought
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coffee
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while
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 only
half
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 as many
people
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drink
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 fresh
coffee
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 as
people
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drink
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instant
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coffee
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 r in Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, instant, coffee, drink, half with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee consumption
  • tea consumption
  • shopping habits
  • demographic factors
  • preference trends
  • price sensitivity
  • convenience
  • per capita
  • restaurateurs
  • beverage industry
  • consumer behavior
  • market analysis
  • quantitative data
  • qualitative analysis
  • trend analysis
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • seasonal variations
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