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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart demonstrates
illiteracy
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ratings
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rating
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ratings
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 around the world, distributed by region and by gender.
Overall
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, South Asia region prevails the highest female
illiteracy
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 percentage and the rating of women exceeds men in all areas.
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 with, the lowest indicator
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illiteracy
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 is in developed countries, which is about 2 per
cent
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 of
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.
Then
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, Latin America and Caribbean regions have 10 per
cent
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 of male and approximately 13 per
cent
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 of female
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.
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, in East Asia quantity of uneducated individuals is a bit less than in Latin America, bur percentage of women is larger and amount 20 per
cent
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.
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 3 areas have the highest rates in
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comparison with other regions. It could be observed, that the men rate is close to 30 per
cent
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 in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia.
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, female rating is much higher in each field, which is about 50-55 per
cent
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 at all.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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