The diagram below shows how glass is recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how glass is recycled.

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The diagram illustrates the way of recycling glass. In short, there are several steps from collecting
bins
to renewing and
finally
that
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apply
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it
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apply
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will be used as
bins
again.
To begin
with, people should trash glass
bins
to certain places to recycle them. After that, the
bins
are transported to the treatment plant by track. At the treatment plant, they are put into a washing and sterilising machine
firstly
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first
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, where they can be completely clean. Surprisingly, the cleaned
bins
are not reused as bottles as they are after cleaning. It is crushed and melted in a machine at the next step. Following that, the
melt
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melted
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glass is poured into a mold machine and
took
Wrong verb form
takes
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some time to be solid perfectly. At
this
stage, they are remolded as
bins
again, and
after
this
, they
finally
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are finally
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ready to ship
for
Change preposition
to
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supermarkets and will be used as bottles which
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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container
Fix the agreement mistake
containers
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of various drinks again.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bins with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • recycled
  • stages
  • collection
  • waste glass
  • sources
  • bottles
  • jars
  • windows
  • transported
  • recycling facility
  • sorted
  • color
  • processes
  • cleaned
  • impurities
  • labels
  • caps
  • crushed
  • cullet
  • raw material
  • melted
  • furnace
  • temperature
  • molded
  • new glass products
  • distribution
  • consumers
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