The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The diagram gives information about
two
different processes of production
, one of them is cement
production
and the other one is about
concrete Change preposition
apply
production
. Overall
, as is presented in the diagram, before producing the concrete, we need to produce cement
, and both of them has
a lot of stages until the finished product.
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
First
of all, for cement
production
we need to start with the Add a comma
production,
first
two
materials, limestone and clay, which are going to be crushed and transformed into powder before the mixing process. Moving forward, the mix is going
through the rotating heater, and just after into the grinder,once everything is Wrong verb form
goes
grinded
, the Correct your spelling
ground
cement
is ready to be packed into the bags.
Secondly
, to produce concrete, four elements are essential, water, cement
, sand and gravel in different proportions. Cement
and water are the first
two
elements, 15 per cent
for the first
and 10 per cent
for the other one, just after these, the next two
materials are sand , which is 25 per cent
and 50 per cent
of concrete, all together into the concrete mixer.Submitted by atomoiaga46 on
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