Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?
Nowadays, many people are struggling with their
jobs
because they do not like it or do not have enough talent to apply for better organizations or just have more valuable jobs
. In my mind, it can happen because of parents
. When children
are going to study at university their parents
, in most cases, are deciding what major will their son or daughter have. Moreover
, some people do not believe in themselves and can not work
harder to get more opportunities and knowledge for better jobs
. Respectively, in our time we have so many workers who do not like their job.
First of all, some parents
have a really huge influence on their children
about their future majors, jobs
etc. In my opinion, children
or guys who are already 18 years old may decide on their own because it is their own life and maybe they want to live it in another way. For instance
, I have a best friend and his mother always trying to make decisions instead
of him. Consequently
, after these rivals and argues with his mother he feels bad and disappointed. As i
know, he really likes horse riding but his mother makes him Change the capitalization
I
work
in the office.
On the other hand
, most community
have so much laziness and just want to have a large amount of money. But Change to a plural noun
communities
this
thing is only in their heads, no more. In my mind, Add an article
the nation
a nation
nation
must hard Fix the agreement mistake
nations
work
to reach their
goals, probably, they should make some aims in Correct pronoun usage
its
direction
of what they want and try to break the walls and reach them. Correct article usage
the direction
For example
, I used to speak with an interesting person when I was living in Spain. He had a really substantial amount of money, a lot of cars, and houses. The only thing that he said - was hard work
.
To sum up
, parents
must not deal with a
life of their Correct article usage
the
children
, in my opinion, they can only give them a piece of advice. Moreover
, people should break the rules and system to reach and have a dream job.Submitted by faceit0990 on
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