Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

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Nowadays, many people are struggling with their

jobs

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because they do not like it or do not have enough talent to apply for better organizations or just have more valuable

jobs

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. In my mind, it can happen because of

parents

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. When

children

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are going to study at university their

parents

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, in most cases, are deciding what major will their son or daughter have.

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, some people do not believe in themselves and can not

work

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harder to get more opportunities and knowledge for better

jobs

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. Respectively, in our time we have so many workers who do not like their job. First of all, some

parents

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have a really huge influence on their

children

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about their future majors,

jobs

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etc. In my opinion,

children

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or guys who are already 18 years old may decide on their own because it is their own life and maybe they want to live it in another way.

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, I have a best friend and his mother always trying to make decisions

instead

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of him.

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, after these rivals and argues with his mother he feels bad and disappointed. As

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know, he really likes horse riding but his mother makes him

work

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in the office.

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, most

community

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communities

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have so much laziness and just want to have a large amount of money. But

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thing is only in their heads, no more. In my mind,

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the nation

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nation

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must hard

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to reach

their

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goals, probably, they should make some aims in

direction

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the direction

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of what they want and try to break the walls and reach them.

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, I used to speak with an interesting person when I was living in Spain. He had a really substantial amount of money, a lot of cars, and houses. The only thing that he said - was hard

work

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parents

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must not deal with

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life of their

children

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, in my opinion, they can only give them a piece of advice.

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, people should break the rules and system to reach and have a dream job.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

343 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

dread
passion
inherent talent
fufilling
career
job
fulfilled
unhappy
unsatisfied
work-life balance
burnout
stress
depression
anxiety
self-esteem
emotional well-being
potential
achieve
success
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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

Your opinion

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