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The table below shows the percentage of the population and the types of houses they live in 3 areas of a city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of the population and the types of houses they live in 3 areas of a city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the proportion of people who are living in different
type
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types
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 of
home
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homes
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 in the three distinct locations in a specific town.
It is clear that
 approximately the same number of individuals
lives
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 in all three parts.
However
, in
Green
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the Green
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park
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Park
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area
, the
Southberg
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Southern
area
, and
Central
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the Central
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area
 the majority of the population reside in flats or apartments, terraced, and detached
houses
, respectively. In the Green
park
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Park
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area
,
flat
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flats
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 or apartments accounted for 76% of people’s
choice
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choices
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, followed by terraced
houses
 at 14%. Semi-detached and detached homes each represented 5% of preferences.
In contrast
, in the Central
area
, 39% of
peoples
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people
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 have detached homes, 28% live in semi-detached
houses
, and 33% of other families own
of
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terraced
houses
 and
flat
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flats
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 or
apartment
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apartments
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. In comparison with other areas,
Southberg
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Southern
 has the highest percentage of
population
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the population
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 living in terraced
houses
 at 56%. Flats and apartments are the second most popular choice among individuals, with 25% opting
of
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for
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this
 type of housing. Eventually, the remaining 19% of
population
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the population
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 choose to live in detached and semi-detached
houses
.
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