the charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the charts show

that

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what

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graduate

and postgraduate students who did not go into full-life

work

did after leaving college in 2008.

overall

,in 2008,

number

graduate

students’

part time

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part-time

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work

was 17735, voluntary

work

was 3500,it was the lowest one.

Further

study

was 29665. it was the greatest.

Lastly

unemployment

was 16235.

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number

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a number

the number

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of postgraduate students’ part-time

work

was 2535, voluntary

work

was 345,

further

study

was 2725 and

unemployment

was 1625. Looking at the details,

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two

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the two

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charts, it was really different.

number

graduate

students’

further

study

was 29665.

Whereas

postgraduate students’

further

study

was 2725. there was

really

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a really

the really

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big difference.

Graduate

students’ voluntary

work

was 3500,

number

of postgraduate students’ was 345. These two

was

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the least of the charts.

Graduate

students’ part-time

work

was 17735,

postgraduate

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and postgraduate

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students’ part-time

work

was 2535.

Lastly

the

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in the

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first chart,

unemployment

was 16235.

The

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In the

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second chart,

unemployment

was 1625.

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the charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The increase in production and consumption of meat has resulted in the destruction of the natural environment. What is the cause?What can be done to solve the problem?

Fewer young people play sports these days. why is this? what can be done to encourage more young people to do sports?

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?

Some people think that mental strength is more important for success in sport. Some believe physical health is more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.