the charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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apply

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what

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graduate

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and postgraduate students who did not go into full-life

work

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did after leaving college in 2008.

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,in 2008,

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graduate

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students’

part time

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part-time

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work

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was 17735, voluntary

work

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was 3500,it was the lowest one.

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study

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was 29665. it was the greatest.

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unemployment

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was 16235.

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number

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of postgraduate students’ part-time

work

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was 2535, voluntary

work

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was 345,

further

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study

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was 2725 and

unemployment

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was 1625. Looking at the details,

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charts, it was really different.

number

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graduate

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students’

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study

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was 29665.

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postgraduate students’

further

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study

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was 2725. there was

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big difference.

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students’ voluntary

work

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was 3500,

number

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of postgraduate students’ was 345. These two

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the least of the charts.

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students’ part-time

work

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was 17735,

postgraduate

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and postgraduate

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students’ part-time

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was 2535.

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first chart,

unemployment

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was 16235.

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second chart,

unemployment

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was 1625.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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the charts below show what uk graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

University students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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