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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows different sectors (
agriculture
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,
industry
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,
services
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) that impacted India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is noteworthy that the contribution of
Services
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 increased gradually
while
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 the rate of
Industry
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 declined throughout the given period. At the beginning of the period, the effect of
agriculture
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 overpowered the three fields.
This
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figure
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 was recorded at above 60. The
industry
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 and
services
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 recorded less than 20. After 20 years,
although
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 the
figure
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 for
agriculture
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 had a steady decrease, it still greatly affected GDP among the three sectors. The
figure
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 for
Industry
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 and
Services
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 figured at about 25 and 28,
repectively
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respectively
.
However
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, the rate for
services
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 recorded the most significant impact on GDP over 40 in 1990. The
industry
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 had almost no change after 1980, recording approximately 25.
At the end
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 of the period, the service
figure
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 peaked at 60
while
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 the rate for
agriculture
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 fell to just above 10.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, industry, services, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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