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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The bar charts illustrate what did not go into full-time
work
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, which
are
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 the
UK
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graduates
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 and postgraduate students after graduating college in 2008. The
UK
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graduates
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work
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 more than the
UK
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postgraduates
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.
Overall
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, there are four categories excluding full-time
work
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, namely part-time
work
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, voluntary
work
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,
further
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 study and unemployment. The highest number of
postgraduates
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 did not reach the least number of
graduates
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.
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 with, the
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 of
further
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 study were the greatest proportion in the
UK
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, which was similar to the
postgraduates
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' highest. Interestingly, the four categories' figure in
graduates
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 was as similar
as
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 the
postgraduates
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 statistic in 2008. The number of voluntary works was the least valuable in both classifications. In the
UK
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postgraduates
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, students tended to
work
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 part-time jobs and go
further
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 study in 2008, which was likely the
graduates
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.
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, there were a lot of students in the two charts, which are included in the category of unemployment.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, uk, graduates, postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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