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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The bar charts illustrate what did not go into full-time
work
, which
are
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 the
UK
graduates
 and postgraduate students after graduating college in 2008. The
UK
graduates
work
 more than the
UK
postgraduates
.
Overall
, there are four categories excluding full-time
work
, namely part-time
work
, voluntary
work
,
further
 study and unemployment. The highest number of
postgraduates
 did not reach the least number of
graduates
.
To begin
 with, the
graduates
 of
further
 study were the greatest proportion in the
UK
, which was similar to the
postgraduates
' highest. Interestingly, the four categories' figure in
graduates
 was as similar
as
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 the
postgraduates
 statistic in 2008. The number of voluntary works was the least valuable in both classifications. In the
UK
postgraduates
, students tended to
work
 part-time jobs and go
further
 study in 2008, which was likely the
graduates
.
In addition
, there were a lot of students in the two charts, which are included in the category of unemployment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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