The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart describes the proportions of the income families in one country spent on various aspects in 1968 and 2018.
It is noticeable that food
is
the main expense of families in 1968, Wrong verb form
was
while
in 2018 the spent
Replace the word
spending
of
leisure took place.
Looking into more details, the percentage of the spending Change preposition
on
of
food saw a most Change preposition
on
dramatically
decrease, which Change the adverb
dramatic
drop
from 35% to around 17% throughout the year. Wrong verb form
dropped
Similarly
, the proportion
of clothing and
Correct word choice
apply
footware
and personal goods Correct your spelling
footwear
also
declined significantly, both almost reduced by half. However
, although
the proportion
of fuel and power also
saw a drop, it was a slightly
change.
In comparison, the Change the adverb
slight
proportion
of housing, transport and leisure all doubled in the period of 50 years. Especially the percentage of leisure raised
from about 9% to 23%, becoming the major expense in 2018, followed by housing at 19% and food Verb problem
rose
in
17%. Change preposition
at
Moreover
, the proportion
of houshold
goods remained stable at around 8% during 1968-2018.Correct your spelling
household
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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