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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The charts show the
number
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 of
students
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 who did not get a full-time job after graduating from college in the UK, in 2008.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 who made
further
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 study after their graduation was the highest
between
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among
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both
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graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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.
Also
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,the
number
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 of
students
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 who did voluntary work was the
least
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lowest
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 in
both
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 charts.
Students
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 who did
further
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 study had the highest rate with almost 30000.
Post
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Postgraduate
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graduate
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students
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also
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 had the highest
number
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.
However
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, it was equal to
one tenth
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one-tenth
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 of
graduate
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students
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. People who did voluntary work had the lowest rate in
both
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 3500 and 345.
Graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 who got unemployed were almost half the rate of
students
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 who did
further
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 study, with a
number
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 of 16235 and 1625.
Students
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 who got part-time jobs had the second highest
number
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 in
both
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 charts with 17735 and 2535 people.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, further".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, both, graduate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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