some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools.

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Introduction

Nowadays, some people believe that educating

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and

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important

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attending mixed

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while

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others think

contrary

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the contrary

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that

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and that

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teaching

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and

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is better in individual

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. In my opinion,

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need to

study

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with

girls

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in mixed

schools

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Body paragraph 1

On the one hand, studying in separate

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is necessary because if

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study

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along

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alone

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without

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that

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apply

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they will

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study

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study

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successful

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than

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foreign

university

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universities

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they

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educate better in spite of

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being separate

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separate

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, but it

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for me.

Body paragraph 2

On the other hand

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, educating in mixed

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is better than studying separately, because studying with

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get

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motivate

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for

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male

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, if gentlemen

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with

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that

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they get motivated and

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better than after. And reading

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efficiency

increases in that country.

Conclusion

In conclusion, in my

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need to

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with

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Mar 29, 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion

Revise and polish your introduction and conclusion to make sure they are clear and effectively summarize your essay's main points

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Coherence and Cohesion

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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4
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

138 words

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