You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates
the
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apply
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information about the
sales
of four different categories of digital
games
(including mobile phone
games
, online
games
, console
games
and handheld
games
) in
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the glob
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glob
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globe
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from 2000 and 2006.
Overall
,X made with
years
and y made
sales
in billions of dollars.There was
significant
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a significant
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upward trend
by
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for
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handheld
games
and
other
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the other
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three
games
represented
lowest
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the lowest
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percentages than which
game
.
However
, end of the period more online
game
sales
improve
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improved
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and console
game
sales
dropped.
According to
the graph, the beginning of handheld
games
sale
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sales
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accounted
nearly
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for nearly
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10 billion
dollar
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dollars
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.Following that gradually increased.From 2003 to 2005 it remained
same
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the same
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around 15 proportion.
Furthermore
end of the period it reached
highest
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its highest
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approximately 17
dollar
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dollars
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in 2006.
Moreover
, console
game
sales
exactly
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were exactly
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6 in 2000.
Then
moderately decreased
last
two
years
and end of
year
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the year
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which was roughly 3.
Hense
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Hence
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, there
was
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were
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not any mobile phone
game
sales
and
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or
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console
game
sales
in
first
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the first
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two
years
.
Tiny
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A tiny
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amount contributed
online
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to online
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games
by 2001.
Additionally
grew and represented
considerable
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a considerable
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amount in 2006 by around 10 billion
dollar
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dollars
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. Mobile
phone
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phones
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and online
games
accounted
under
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for under
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6
dollar
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dollars
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sales
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in sales
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between 2001 to 2005
years
.After 2006 it was changed over the 6
dollar
sales
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, games, years, game, dollar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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