The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts show the difference in preference for staying in cities, towns and rural areas by the native and migrated Australians in the years from 1925 to 2010.
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, both the local and outside citizens chose to stay the most in cities,
whereas
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the number of people decreased significantly from both the towns and urban areas. On the one
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the percentages of citizens by birth and by migration
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a place for a home in cities were around 45% and 60% respectively in 1995.
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amount faced an increment in 2010 and reached almost 65% and 80% for native-born and foreign-born.
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, in 1995 almost 20% and 15% of locals and outsiders stayed in Towns respectively, which reduced in 2010 and reached 15% and 10% respectively. Australian-born about 30%
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and outsider-born 40% of people stayed in rural areas in 1995, which faced a huge downfall in 2020, becoming tentatively 18%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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