The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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apply
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table and pie charts
illstrate
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illustrate
illustrated
on
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the police
budget
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for 2017 and 2018 in specific
area
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areas
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in Britain,
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specifically ,
table
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the table
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describes the income
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generation
methods and the pie charts depict
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on
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expenditure of the
budget
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.
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, the income
was
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increased over the
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two-year
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year
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period
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spending significantly more on technological
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aspects
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according to
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the police
budget
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. In detail, the funding from
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the national
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government was increased from 175.5 million
pound
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pounds
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to 177.8
millions
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million
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from 2017 to 2018
while
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total
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the total
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collection was increased from around 14
millions
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million
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, and it was covered mainly by increased local tax income from 91.2
millionin
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million in
million
2017
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from 2017
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to 102.3
millions
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million
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in the
year
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2018 .
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, from the annual police
budget
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, the vast majority of
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threefourth
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three-fourth
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was
spended
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spent
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on salaries in 2017 ,and it was reduced to
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the majority
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of 69% in the next
year
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.
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, a tiny minority of 8% , was
spended
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spent
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over
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on
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technological
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the technological
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aspect
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aspects
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had increased to
minority
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a minority
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of
mere
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modest 14% in the
year
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2018 ;
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the modest 17% expenditure on building and transport
was remained
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remained
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the same in both years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "modest" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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