The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrate
illustrated
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the police Change preposition
apply
budget
for 2017 and 2018 in specific area
in Britain, Fix the agreement mistake
areas
and
specifically , Correct word choice
apply
table
describes the income Add an article
the table
generetion
methods and the pie charts depict Correct your spelling
generation
detail
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details
on
expenditure of the Change preposition
of
budget
.
Overall
, the income was
increased over the Unnecessary verb
apply
two
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two-year
year
period while
spending significantly more on technological aspect
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aspects
according to
the police budget
.
In detail, the funding from national
government was increased from 175.5 million Correct article usage
the national
pound
to 177.8 Change to a plural noun
pounds
millions
from 2017 to 2018 Change to singular
million
while
total
collection was increased from around 14 Add an article
the total
millions
, and it was covered mainly by increased local tax income from 91.2 Change to singular
million
millionin
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million in
million
2017
to 102.3 Change preposition
from 2017
millions
in the Change to singular
million
year
2018 .
On the other hand
, from the annual police budget
, the vast majority of massive
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the massive
threefourth
was Correct your spelling
three-fourth
three fourth
spended
on salaries in 2017 ,and it was reduced to Correct your spelling
spent
majority
of 69% in the next Add an article
the majority
a majority
year
. However
, a tiny minority of 8% , was spended
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spent
over
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on
technological
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the technological
aspect
had increased to Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
minority
of Add an article
a minority
the minority
mere
modest 14% in the Correct article usage
a mere
year
2018 ;while
the modest 17% expenditure on building and transport was remained
the same in both years.Change to the active voice
remained
has remained
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