The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year
The bar chart gives demographic information for employment sectors and gender in Australia
last
year. There were significantly more men
than women
in management, production
- over 400,00 in each case and 800,000 more for tradesperson roles. When looking at management roles proportionally, they were three times more likely to be filled by Correct word choice
and production
men
. However
, the gap was largest in trade occupations with men
ten times more likely to be doing this
kind of work. There was a less sizeable difference for labourers and semi-professionals but still considerably more men
than women
. The only sectors in which there were more women
than men
were in
those of professionals and clerical, with 50,000 and 100,00 more Change preposition
apply
women
in each respectively. However
, when looking at the figures you can see that there were still a high number of men
who were employed in these areas.
Overall
, we can see that there are more men
than women
in nearly every sector and even those
with a female majority the figures were close. Change preposition
in those
This
means that men
make up a disproportionate amount of the Australian workforce.Submitted by elnur.adil on
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