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some people dislike changes in their society and in their lives,and want things to stay the same. why do some people want things to stay the same? why should change be regarded as something positive?

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 some
people
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 like
changes
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, because, we
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t
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 accept something suddenly
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change
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changing
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 when we
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are not
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 already,
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, I used to be
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 way. but now, I learned how to accept any
changes
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 in my
life
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. in
this
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people
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 want to stay the same and how
people
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learn
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 embrace the
changes
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. Until now, more things all the
change
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, something we can'
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pretect
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protect
predict
 happen anytime,
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change
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 tomorrow, or our friends and relatives suddenly
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, I can understand most
people
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 can'
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 accept that accidents in
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, more uncertainly make
people
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 sad or
nervious
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nervous
,
people
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 want to control anything in
life
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. But in fact, we always can'
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 decide anything in our
life
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society. we always want to same forever,
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 can make
our
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us
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 comfortable
everyday
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,
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, that's
anable
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stable
, so, we
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 learn how to embrace
change
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 and the
change
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not
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is not
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necessary
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necessarily
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 bad. some
changes
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 can make
people
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thinking
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think
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 better, maybe we can find new
feels
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 rather than stay the same.
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, I
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kept
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on
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 about five years, the traffic jam is too big problem in my city,
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 I need to consider maybe I will
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to
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work
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everyday
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,
but
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I never think I can
also
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 by the subway, because I don'
t
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 like
change
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. But
last
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 year, my husband with
me
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 went to
work
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 same time on that day,
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, the road
have
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 many cars, and I just
want
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wanted
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 to by bus, at that time, he told me, if you
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 select, you will always have trouble in your
life
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, so, we by the subway to
work
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. Remarkably, I already
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the
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 great way to
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, the subway is faster than
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the bus
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, and I am not afraid I will be late. In a nutshell,
changes
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 can give
our
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us
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 new
life
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 or not, since we can‘
t
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control
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control it
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，so， just embrace it，
you
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and you
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 will know，some questions in your
life
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 will
be disappear
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Status quo
  • Skepticism
  • Inevitable
  • Progression
  • Innovation
  • Cultural identity
  • Familiarity
  • Aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Economic stability
  • Global awareness
  • Personal growth
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