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The chart below shows the preferred method of communication for 18–30 years old in three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the preferred method of communication for 18–30 years old in three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#method #communication #years #three #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the best method connection for 18 to 30 years old from 1998 to 2006.
Overall
, the rates of
cmost ommunication techniqes
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most communication techniques
 witnessed a steady over the period,
while
 cellular
phone
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phones
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 exhibit
upward
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an upward
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 trend throughout the years. Turning to details, Cell phones
shown
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gradual
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 increase from 0% in 1996 to 60% in 2006.
This
 proportion was the highest result compared with other countries. In the meantime, the
perecentage
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percentage
 of
linkdine
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LinkedIn
 remained stable from 1996 to 2006,
while
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 was steady until 2004 it
climb
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 to 20%. Moving on the probability of mobile and Food services,
were
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was
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 0% from 1996 to 2002,
Afterthat
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After that
in
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apply
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2004 it slightly
increase
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increased
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 and
rech
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reached
 less than 10%
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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