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The following map details a town now and a proposed future layout. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The following map details a town now and a proposed future layout. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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I glance at the two maps
provide
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 the recent layout of a
town
 and its future proposed plan.
Overall
, the vast majority of the facilities, roads and transportation system will be at the same locations, whilst the airfield will be removed.
According to
 the information shown on the maps, the airfield will be replaced by an industrial estate which connects with the A2
road
 and the
railway
.
Besides
, there will be an additional
road
 which is A4 connecting the A2
road
 and the
railway
 and the
railway
 and the
town
 centre.
Moreover
, there will be a new roundabout on the
railway
 near the gas station. What should be particularly mentioned is the region of the build-up area ring
road
 is planned to be slightly reduced
due to
 the A4
road
 between the
town
 centre and the
railway
.
To sum up
, it can be apparently seen that the future plan of the
town
 focuses more on the arrangement of roads than facilities.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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