Some people are making new friends by using socializing network website and Internet chat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that people should make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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Friendship is one of the basic requirements of human beings. In
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regard, some of them create it by exploiting the internet
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as social networks and web pages and believe that it is a reasonable concept and others say that to make friends one has to meet in person. In
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reason and discuss whether it is a positive or negative impact.
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with, the majority of them believe that making new friends from social media and other online platforms
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quite safe. A professor from Jakarta, namely Profesor Johan made a report about ''what
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would choose whether socializing network website or in-person meeting. The main result shows that 80% of
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tend to online media to get to know new society
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safety before they meet in person. Enormous threats will be affected and someone should double-check before they meet each other.
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others (especially older
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) prefer face-to-face chat. If they feel safe, they will always keep trying to meet in person. To overcome
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shortcoming, the easiest way before meeting someone is due diligence by telephone call. The expression, the behaviour, and
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the gesture are the top three that you would not get only by internet or website chat rooms. If someone will make close
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is the best way.
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, places are crucial factors for the first time
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you have to pay attention.
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, it seems to me that a combination of both standpoints could be the most appropriate solution. Less effort and safety are quite safe for certain
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, it's not sufficient for particular
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that will make a close friend. The combination
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them is
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