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The line graph below shows the international student enrolment numbers at De Salle University from 2005 to 2009 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates data regarding how many
students
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 enrolled in De Salle
university
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University
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 between 2005 and 2009.
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, what stands out from the graph is that
while
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initially
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, most children came from Greece,it was overtaken by the figure for Turkey towards the middle of
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 survey. Looking into detail,in the year 2005,the number of Georgian
students
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in
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 De Salle University was the highest with 180.
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,it decreased substantially during the whole period and stood at just over 40 in 2009. With regard to
students
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 who came from
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other countries,the figures for Iranian and Turk
students
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 showed similar patterns.The former stood at 40 in the first year,after which increased gradually until the end of the period and
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 first with approximately 160.As for the latter,the number of
students
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 who came from Iran
initally
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initially
 was the least with just above 20.It grew
margianlly
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marginally
 during the entire period and stood at 120 in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • international students
  • line graph
  • De Salle University
  • significant changes
  • sharp increases
  • stability
  • decline
  • fluctuations
  • global economic conditions
  • university policies
  • external factors
  • campus diversity
  • resources
  • reputation
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