The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or collage lecturer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or collage lecturer.
The provided graphs illustrate figures about 8 different types of careers, including writers, doctors, chefs, lecturers, lawyers, movie producers, programmers, and businessmen. The bar chart depicts the average amount of
hours
worked per week and the pie chart shows in percentage how many people in each occupation suffering from
stress
and present illnesses related.
Overall
, there does not seem a correlation between high rates of
hours
worked and illness caused by
stress
. The occupation groups who work more are businessmen (70
hours
), movie producers (60
hours
), and doctors (about 52
hours
),
whereas
the occupation groups who suffer more from pressure at work are lecturers (25%), film producers (18%), and physicians (15%). The less frequent groups who struggle with
stress
are software developers (5%), authors (8%), and lawyers (8%),
while
less frequent clusters on working
hours
per week are teachers, cooks, and advocates. Actually, lecturers have the lowest
hours
of work per 7 days and surprisingly they have the highest level of diseases from
stress
.
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