The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people (
Men
,
Women
, and
Children
) who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, it is seen that the
rate
of
women
who eat fruit and vegetables was the highest, and
this
was followed by
Men
. At the beginning of the period, the
rate
of
women
was over 20%,
while
the percentage of
children
's intake was recorded to be only above 10%. After 2001, the percentage of
women
increased gradually to 2006 and reached a peak of approximately 35%.
On the other hand
, the figure for
men
and
children
remained stable until 2003. The
rate
of
men
showed a steady rise of 7% from 2004 to 2006.
At the end
of the period, all categories decreased steadily, but the
rate
of
women
was still the highest. The
rate
of
children
who intake vegetables increased significantly compared to the beginning of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, children, rate with synonyms.
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