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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people (
Men
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,
Women
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, and
Children
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) who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
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, it is seen that the
rate
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 of
women
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 who eat fruit and vegetables was the highest, and
this
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 was followed by
Men
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. At the beginning of the period, the
rate
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 of
women
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 was over 20%,
while
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 the percentage of
children
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's intake was recorded to be only above 10%. After 2001, the percentage of
women
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 increased gradually to 2006 and reached a peak of approximately 35%.
On the other hand
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, the figure for
men
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 and
children
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 remained stable until 2003. The
rate
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 of
men
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 showed a steady rise of 7% from 2004 to 2006.
At the end
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 of the period, all categories decreased steadily, but the
rate
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 of
women
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 was still the highest. The
rate
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 of
children
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 who intake vegetables increased significantly compared to the beginning of the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, children, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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