The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given line graph illustrates the amount of
of
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fish , Lamb, beef and chicken
were
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eaten in a European nation during the
period
of 1979 to 2004 in
grams
per person per
week
.
Overall
, the consumption of chicken increased over the
period
while
lamb,
beeef
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beef
and fish were eaten reduced with all four items posting wild fluctuations during the
period
. In detail, in 1979 beef was the highest consumed
non vegetarian
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food item of the given four foods, with nearly just below 225
grams
were
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eaten by individual per
week
.
However
, the amount plunged during
next
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two to three years ,
into
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nearly 175
grams
and surged to a peak of more than 225
grams
in
following
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2-3 years.
Thereafter
, the level came to a 2 to
3
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year
plateau after a sudden
dipped
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over the next 1-2 years.Following it, with many
flactuations
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fluctuations
with a
downword
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downward
trend in
2004
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2004,
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it posted a level just above 100
grams
as the amount of beef
consumption
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per
week
.
Furthermore
, in 1979 fish consumption was the lowest with
near
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60
grams
per
week
,
while
it had declined slightly
further
with fluctuations , maintaining the lowest value
through out
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the study
period
.
However
,
chicken
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the chicken
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was eaten just below 150
grams
in the
year
1979, and with wild
fluctuation
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it had
been
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risen to
near
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250
grams
in the
year
2004
and
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which is the highest for that
year
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, grams, week, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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