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The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.

The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.
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The table shows
the
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information about various categories of independent
films
 that were performed in
UK
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the UK
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 and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Ireland back in 2012.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that there were only
few
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a few
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genre
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genres
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 that were taking place the majority both on
number
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a number
the number
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 of releases and
percentage
 of
income
.
However
,
while
 drama and documentary genres
were
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had
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 the highest
on
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number
 of
release
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releases
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, it was
a
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the
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comedy
genre
 that had the biggest
percentage
 of
income
. In terms of
number
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a number
the number
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 of releases, from 148
films
 that were released
at
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in
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 2012, the biggest
genre
 was drama and documentary which
were sharing
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shared
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 the same
number
 at 35. By
this
, so these two genres
has
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have
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 a proportion to almost
a
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half of the
number
 of released
films
.
Moreover
, the
number
 was followed by
comedy
 which stood at 26 and
then
 horror and thriller which were performed quite the same at 14 and 13, respectively. The least
on
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number
 of
release
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releases
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 is biopic
genre
 with only
single
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a single
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 release
at
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in
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 the year. In terms of
income
 from ticket sales,
comedy
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the comedy
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genre
 took
a
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the
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 lead with almost
a
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half of the total
income
were
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running to
this
genre
,
stood
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which stood
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 at 45.4% precisely.
Furthermore
, the only
genre
 that
also
 had
double digit
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on
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income
percentage
 was horror at 20.2%. The other
genre
 only had
the
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an
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income
percenatge
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percentage
percentages
 below 10% or in a single digit.
To sum up
, both in terms of
number
 of released
films
 and
percentage
 of
income
 from ticket sales, there was a huge gap between the genres. The most released ones are
documentary
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documentaries
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 and drama,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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 the biggest
propotion
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proportion
 of
income
were
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was
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 found in
comedy
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, genre, number, percentage, income, comedy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • independent films
  • categories
  • released
  • notable differences
  • trends
  • overall patterns
  • specific numbers
  • analyze
  • popular
  • themes
  • less likely
  • explored
  • independent cinema
  • significant disparities
  • data analysis
  • terminology
  • genres
  • descriptive terms
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