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The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the amount of
water
 which is used for three different purposes including industrial, farming, and household usage in six different
region
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regions
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 of the globe.
Overall
, a rapid glance shows that
in
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one-thirds
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one-third
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 of areas consist of North America and Europe the
most
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highest
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 percentage of
water
 used in industry.
While
 in the other two-thirds places include South America, South East and Central Asia, and Africa use more proportion of
water
 in agriculture.
Whereas
, the least amount of
water
 is wasted on domestic in all restricts. North American and European people apply around
a
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apply
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half of their used
water
 in industrial activities with a slightly
differece
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different
difference
, at 5%. These nations, in
domestical
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domestic
usage
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usage,
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 have approximately the same pattern with
2
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a 2
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% variation, which is logically followed by the bulk of
water
 they are used for planting with around
5
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a 5
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% deviation. In the next selected category, agriculturers
are used
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 the most proportion of
water
 supplies, with a small
dicrepancy
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discrepancy
 in pattern just in South America which
waste
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wastes
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 more
waters
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water
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on
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in
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 other parts rather than the rest of
three
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the three
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 parts of
this
 cluster.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Allocation
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Industrialization
  • Domestic sector
  • Agricultural sector
  • Global trends
  • Water scarcity
  • Resource management
  • Technological innovations
  • Water recycling
  • Population growth
  • International cooperation
  • Water wastage
  • Sustainable practices
  • Water footprint
  • Resource allocation conflicts
  • Environmental impact
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