In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports, What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?
Nowadays, there is
a
increasing Change the article
an
tendecy
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tendency
of consuming
doping by sportsmen. It can reflect on Change preposition
to consume
athlets
health and even may Correct your spelling
athletes
be cause
of their inability to work other individuals. Correct your spelling
because
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this
essay will be discussed
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discuss
results
of Correct article usage
the results
use
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the use
performance-enhancing
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of performance-enhancing
drugs
and a way how to escape from that problem.
Obviously, that
after taking Correct word choice
apply
of
forbidden Change preposition
apply
drugs
in sports there can come up ruinous consequences. Athlets
who use constantly banned Correct your spelling
Athletes
drugs
may obtain
health issues Verb problem
have
such
as heart attacks or failure, and different chronic diseases. Likewise
, there known
facts that after Add a missing verb
are known
intaking
those Verb problem
taking
drugs
some sport
players have not been able to do simple physical activities and become invalids. Change the noun form
sports
Furhermore
, sportsmen who Correct your spelling
Furthermore
took
it can become unconfident Wrong verb form
take
person
, Fix the agreement mistake
people
sinse
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since
drugs
give them energy during the short term, as
a Correct word choice
and as
result
their Add the comma(s)
result,
career
can be ruined.
To tackle Fix the agreement mistake
careers
this
problem, government
should encourage complex Add an article
the government
mesures
. Correct your spelling
measures
Firstly
, there have to be compulsory disciplines what
have to be taken by Correct word choice
that
human
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a human
the human
being
who Fix the agreement mistake
beings
planning
create a career in sports. It will help to prevent those issues. Add the particle
planning to
Besides
, authorities ought to make a law which contributes to clearly show to athletes
duties of taking Change noun form
athletes'
athlete's
dopings
.
Summing up, it is one of the significant Fix the agreement mistake
doping
question
of modern society which can lead to the health problems of sports Change to a plural noun
questions
player
and to avoid these state has to Fix the agreement mistake
players
apodt
the law Correct your spelling
adopt
what
is knit with these issues.Correct word choice
that
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