In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports, What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?

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doping by sportsmen. It can reflect on
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health and even may
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of their inability to work other individuals.
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drugs
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after taking
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forbidden
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in sports there can come up ruinous consequences.
Athlets
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who use constantly banned
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health issues
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as heart attacks or failure, and different chronic diseases.
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facts that after
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those
drugs
some
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players have not been able to do simple physical activities and become invalids.
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, sportsmen who
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it can become unconfident
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since
drugs
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their
career
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can be ruined. To tackle
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should encourage complex
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measures
.
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, there have to be compulsory disciplines
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have to be taken by
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create a career in sports. It will help to prevent those issues.
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, authorities ought to make a law which contributes to clearly show to
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duties of taking
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. Summing up, it is one of the significant
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of modern society which can lead to the health problems of sports
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and to avoid these state has to
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adopt
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is knit with these issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Performance-enhancing drugs (PEDs)
  • Doping
  • Anabolic steroids
  • Health ramifications
  • Stigmatization
  • Disqualification
  • Anti-doping agencies
  • Therapeutic Use Exemptions (TUEs)
  • Integrity of sports
  • Biological passport
  • In-competition testing
  • Out-of-competition testing
  • Whistleblower
  • Ban substances
  • Suspension
  • World Anti-Doping Agency (WADA)
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