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The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time (excluding email). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time (excluding email). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Given are two pie charts, providing a comparison of various internet
activities
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.
While
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 the first chart compares the time spent by
people
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 between 18 and 26 for various
activities
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 on the Net, the second compares them for older
people
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 between the ages of 60 and 70. Evident from the information provided is the fact that
although
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 making a booking for the cinema or travelling is the most widely enjoyed activity among older
people
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 at 25%, it is the least popular one among the younger at just 5%.
By contrast
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, social networking is the most widely enjoyed activity among younger
people
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 at 24%,
whereas
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 it has the third stage among the older.
Also
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, for both groups, researching health data and making purchases have approximately the same popularity at approximately 21% and 12% respectively. Of these
activities
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, the least popular are playing games for the older population and making bookings for the younger
people
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 at merely 5%. It is interesting to note that regarding the time spent on diverse
activities
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 on the internet, there are some striking similarities and differences among younger and older
people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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