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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart compares the frequencies Americans went to fast
food
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 restaurants in 2003, 2006 and 2013.
It is clear that
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 most
people
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 ate fast
food
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 once a week both in 2003 and 2006. But in 2013,
people
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 tended to eat with a lower frequency, once or twice a month.
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, the proportion of those who ate fast
food
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 every day and those who never ate was quite low. In detail , around 32% of
people
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 in the USA went to fast
food
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 restaurants once a week between 2003 and 2006
while
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 the figure dropped to below 30% in 2013.
In contrast
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,
although
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 the proportion of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 once or twice a month saw a decrease of 5% compared to 30% in 2003, the figure dramatically rose to over 32% in 2013. The percentage of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day was steady (below 5%) and the figure for those who never ate was similar.
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, the proportion of
people
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 who went out for fast
food
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 several times a week stood between 15% to 20% and under 15% of
people
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 consisted of those who ate fast
food
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 a few times a year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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