Robots and artificial intelligence are neing developed tp replace in the workplace. Why is this happening?Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

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In the digital age, people seem to consider
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further
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positive
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effect. It can be seen that artificial and automation
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human lives are limitless. Thanks to the machine growth in computer power and
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available,
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algorithms have become more sophisticated. The automation of
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that previously required human labor would now be sophisticated.
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on finance.
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, artificial intelligence applications have been used in human resource management to organize certain aspects of the recruitment
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process. There are several to illustrate the development in the field of AI will
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effects on our lives in the
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future.
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, we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves and technologies can improve safety by reducing the likelihood of human errors. In the industry, most of
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robots
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if the jobs are heavy and need a lot of people,
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instead
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workforce
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it will be less dangerous for
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. It is easy to
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how these growths and many
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will steadily improve our quality of life. In conclusion, replacing AI and
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instead
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, I believe that the expansion of
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