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The graph shows the spending on research into renewable energy of four countries from 1975 to 2000.

The graph shows the spending on research into renewable energy of four countries from 1975 to 2000.
The line graph illustrates information about the amount of
money
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 which was spent on research to get renewable energy
in particular
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 regions between 1975 and 2000.
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, it can be clearly seen that every country witnessed growth,
while
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 none of them engaged in exploring renewable energy at the beginning of the period. Looking at the details,
money
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 spent on research per person
increase
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 significantly in
Switzerland
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 and Denmark.In 1980, every country spent just above 2
dollars
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 on exploration in
Switzerland
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.
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, the figure for Denmark was just
below.
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below
2
dollars
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.In the following 20 years, most people were interested in obtaining renewable energy in
Switzerland
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. The.quantity of
money
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 rose sharply in
Switzerland
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, reaching a peak of above 5
dollars
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at the end
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 of the period.In Denmark, each person spent 3
dollars
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 in 2000. As for the other countries, there were
ultimately
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 increases throughout the period, In 1980,
money
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 spent on
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research
esearch
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research
 was 1 dollar in Spain,
then
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 it decreased until 1990.In 1995, the figure for Spain overtook the UK's
one
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, but
money
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 per person was just under a dollar.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, switzerland, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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