On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of the lost item. Write a letter to the insurance manager. In your letter: describe the item you lost, explain how you lost it, tell the insurance company what you would like them to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to express my concern about a necklace
which
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merely dismissed in the hotel
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last
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night. The aforementioned necklace
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is a kind of gold-made, quite thick having
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weight
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35 grams.
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night there
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a wedding ceremony in the Pearl
eHall
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all
inside the hotel and
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it was on me when I entered the hall.
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11:30 pm when I just entered
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room 313, I realized the necklace
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not with me anymore, I
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the whole room and I did not find it,
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I'm sure the case is somewhere inside
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Pearl
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, please do your best to find out or refund the amount in quick because I will leave the hotel
tommorrow
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tomorrow
afternoon. Yours faithfully Abraham Streeter
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greeting and closing
Consider starting your letter with a polite greeting and introducing yourself briefly before delving into the issue
single idea per paragraph
For clarity and impact, ensure each paragraph sticks to one main idea. You have done this well, but further separation of the description of the lost item and the sequence of events might enhance readability.
complete response
While you have provided a description of the event and your request, adding a brief overview of the steps you have already taken (e.g., contacting the hotel management) could strengthen your letter.
suitable writing tone
A slightly more formal tone could be beneficial. Avoid using casual phrases like 'did not find it, therefore I'm sure' and use more formal language instead.
task response
You clearly described the lost item, making it easier for the insurance company to understand what you have lost.
coherence cohesion
The chronological order of events is clear, enhancing the letter's coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable item
  • travel insurance
  • insurance manager
  • reimbursement
  • coverage policy
  • preventive measures
  • sentimental value
  • monetary value
  • swift resolution
  • reimbursement
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