The graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012.

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The bar chart presented the comparison of sports

activities

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played by

male

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males

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and females in an English town in 2012. Sports including tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming, football, and history are held. In terms of general preference,

overall

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boys tend to enjoy physical

activities

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more than girls.

However

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, girls are

also

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fond of

activities

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such

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as badminton and swimming. The

amount

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number

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of people entertained by swimming

are

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above

than

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apply

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the rest of the physical

activities

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while

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the number of love hockey is lower.

Furthermore

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, tennis had the same quantity as

the

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apply

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swimming.

Secondly

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, the number of males

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who likes

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likes

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football

are

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higher than the rest of the physical activity. Meanwhile, hockey had the least amount of people.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

115 words

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The graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012.

Aircraft have been increasingly used for transport fruit and vegetable to some country where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge negative effect on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

The rise of social media has affected personal relatioships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages ?