The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram explains the way in which melting stage,where they are heated in high
aluminium
can is
recycled.
Wrong verb form
be
Overall
,what stands out from the picture is that the recycling process of aluminium
cans
is a cyclical process that consists of several main stages,including use,collection,cleaning,sorting,compressing,heating and melting,rolling,recycling and reusing.
First of all,after aluminium
cans
are used by consumers,they are discarded in recycling bins that
is
for Change the verb form
are
aluminium
cans
only,waiting for trucks to transport them to recycling
centre.Once there,Add an article
the recycling
a recycling
cans
are cleaned to remove any residue after which they are sorted and those that can be reused are shredded and compressed .Once compressing
step is over,these Add an article
the compressing
a compressing
cans
undergoCorrect article usage
the
tempratures
.After that,melted Correct your spelling
temperatures
cans
are rolled and their thickness varies between 2.5 mm and 6 mm.Finally
,they are recycled and three quarter
of all Correct your spelling
three-quarters
cans
become available for customers.After they are reused,they go through the recycling process all over again.Submitted by Name_1234 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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