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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram explains the way in which
aluminium
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 can
is
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be
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 recycled.
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,what stands out from the picture is that the recycling process of
aluminium
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cans
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 is a cyclical process that consists of several main stages,including use,collection,cleaning,sorting,compressing,heating and melting,rolling,recycling and reusing. First of all,after
aluminium
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cans
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 are used by consumers,they are discarded in recycling bins
that
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is
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are
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 for
aluminium
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cans
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 only,waiting for trucks to transport them to
recycling
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the recycling
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 centre.Once there,
cans
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 are cleaned to remove any residue after which they are sorted and those that can be reused are shredded and compressed .Once
compressing
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the compressing
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 step is over,these
cans
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 undergo
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the
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melting stage,where they are heated in high
tempratures
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temperatures
.After that,melted
cans
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 are rolled and their thickness varies between 2.5 mm and 6 mm.
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,they are recycled and
three quarter
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three-quarters
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 of all
cans
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 become available for customers.After they are reused,they go through the recycling process all over again.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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