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The chart give information about the proportion of boys and girls of a shcool who achieved high grades( A or B+) in respective courses.

#information #proportion #boys #girls #shcool #grades #b+ #courses
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The charts show the changes in the performance of
boys
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 and
girls
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 in different subjects in 1996 and 2000. Over 42% of
boys
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 achieved a high grade in Humanities in 2000, up from 21%. The
proportion
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 of
girls
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 who achieved
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 standard in
this
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 subject was lower at 25% in 2000,
although
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 it was 32% in 1996.
Boys
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also
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 improved their performance in the Arts significantly with the figure rising from 9% to 21%,
while
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 the
proportion
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 of high-achieving
girls
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 dipped to 25%.
Girls
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 performed better than
boys
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 in Languages,
although
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 the percentage of top achievers declined
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from 45
% to 30%. There were
also
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 improvements in Science and Maths, in which the
proportion
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 of
girls
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 who achieved a good grade rose to 11% and 15% respectively.
In contrast
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, the figures for
boys
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 in these two courses dropped.
Overall
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,
boys
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 outperformed
girls
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 in Science and Maths, but the gap narrowed.
While
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 a larger
proportion
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 of
boys
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 reached higher standards in the Arts, Humanities
as well as
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 Languages, the figures for
girls
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 saw a decline.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, although, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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