The chart give information about the proportion of boys and girls of a shcool who achieved high grades( A or B+) in respective courses.

The charts show the changes in the performance of
boys
and
girls
in different subjects in 1996 and 2000. Over 42% of
boys
achieved a high grade in Humanities in 2000, up from 21%. The
proportion
of
girls
who achieved
this
standard in
this
subject was lower at 25% in 2000,
although
it was 32% in 1996.
Boys
also
improved their performance in the Arts significantly with the figure rising from 9% to 21%,
while
the
proportion
of high-achieving
girls
dipped to 25%.
Girls
performed better than
boys
in Languages,
although
the percentage of top achievers declined
from45
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from 45
% to 30%. There were
also
improvements in Science and Maths, in which the
proportion
of
girls
who achieved a good grade rose to 11% and 15% respectively.
In contrast
, the figures for
boys
in these two courses dropped.
Overall
,
boys
outperformed
girls
in Science and Maths, but the gap narrowed.
While
a larger
proportion
of
boys
reached higher standards in the Arts, Humanities
as well as
Languages, the figures for
girls
saw a decline.
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