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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart compares the amount of
electricity
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 produced and consumed by 10
countries
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 in 2014.
It is clear that
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 China and
United
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the United
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 States were
two
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the two
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 major
countries
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 with the largest
electricity
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 generation and consumption and every country produced more
electricity
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 than their usage except Germany. In detail, the country that generated the largest
electricity
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 in 2014 was China, with 5398
billion
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kWh
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, and its
electricity
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 consumption was
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 the highest at 5322
billion
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kWh
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.
Similarly
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, but at a lower level, the production and consumption of
electricity
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 in the United
State
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States
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 were
also
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 high (4,099
billion
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kWh
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 and 4.866
billion
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kWh
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 respectively).
By contrast
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, the figures for the rest
countries
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 were much lower, compared to one-fifth of those in China or less. Korea, Rep generated and used the least amount of
electricity
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, with
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the figure
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figure
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figures
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 at 485.1
billion
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kWh
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 and 449.5
billion
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kWh
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 respectively.
In addition
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, almost all
countries
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 generated 30 to 200
billion
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kWh
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 more
electricity
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 than they used
while
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 Germany used more
electricity
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 (582.5
billion
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kWh
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) compared to its generation (526.6
billion
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kWh
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).
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, countries, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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