The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares the amount of
electricity
produced and consumed by 10
countries
in 2014.
It is clear that
China and
United
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States were
two
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the two
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major
countries
with the largest
electricity
generation and consumption and every country produced more
electricity
than their usage except Germany. In detail, the country that generated the largest
electricity
in 2014 was China, with 5398
billion
kWh
, and its
electricity
consumption was
likewise
the highest at 5322
billion
kWh
.
Similarly
, but at a lower level, the production and consumption of
electricity
in the United
State
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were
also
high (4,099
billion
kWh
and 4.866
billion
kWh
respectively).
By contrast
, the figures for the rest
countries
were much lower, compared to one-fifth of those in China or less. Korea, Rep generated and used the least amount of
electricity
, with
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at 485.1
billion
kWh
and 449.5
billion
kWh
respectively.
In addition
, almost all
countries
generated 30 to 200
billion
kWh
more
electricity
than they used
while
Germany used more
electricity
(582.5
billion
kWh
) compared to its generation (526.6
billion
kWh
).
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, countries, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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