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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts provide information about the segments of consumed
water
 in
industry
, agriculture, and household use in six continents of the world.
Overall
,
while
 in North America and Europe, industrial purposes made up nearly
the
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half of
water
 usage, other areas of the world utilized a significant amount of
water
 in farming. In detail, it can be clearly observed that in
Afrika
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Africa
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 (84%), Central Asia (88%), and South East Asia (81%), people used by far the largest amount of
water
 for growing yields and in both Asia, 7% of
water
 consumed in domestic chores. In Africa, a quarter of
water
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the water
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used
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is used
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in
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for
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 industrial and household purposes.
However
, in Europe, more than
a
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half of
water
directed
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is directed
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 to
industry
, spending about a third on agriculture and the rest of it
went
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 to homes.
Similarly
, in North America, less than
a
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half of
water
 was in
industry
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the industry
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 and agricultural and domestic
water
 accounted for 39% and 13% respectively. Interestingly, apart from other areas, South
American
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America
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 used approximately a fifth of
water
on
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in
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 households and one in ten was
industry
; but, 71 per cent of
water
 was spent on irrigation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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