The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 and its predicted year in 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below shows information about changes in the
birth
and death
rates from 1901and its predicted year in 2101 which has lead
in New Zealand.
To commence with, it is obvious that there is a dramatic increase in Wrong verb form
led
birth
through the years and Fix the agreement mistake
births
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a noticable
noticable
increase Correct your spelling
noticeable
of
Change preposition
in
death
from 2021 to 2101. In 1901 there Fix the agreement mistake
deaths
is
a low rate of Wrong verb form
was
child
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childbirth
birth
with
20% Change preposition
at
while
death
rate Add an article
the death
is
10%. Wrong verb form
was
Hence
, in 1961 rate of birth
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births
become
Verb problem
increased
to
approximately 65%, Change preposition
by
while
in 2001 this
number is
decreased to 20%, Unnecessary verb
apply
while
in that year the number of peolpe
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people
death
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deaths
showed
a Verb problem
was
noticable
up to 10%.
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noticeable
Overall
, in 2041 the rates of birth
and death
will be equale
and in 2061 Correct your spelling
equal
equalled
birth
will be lower, while
the death
of individuals will be
absolutely go up from 50% to 60%.Unnecessary verb
apply
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