Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both view and give your opinion
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university
students
are willing to derive knowledge
from other subjects
which are not the major ones. However
other individuals consider that they should be fully focused on their main subjects
for a qualification.I believe that students
can learn about additional subjects
if they want.
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to learn additional subjects
.They already have time
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to their main subjects
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On the other side of the argument, it's commonly believed that learning information from other subjects
apart from the most important ones can have numerous beneficial consequences for students
.Sometimes students
can get bored studying similar subjects
for months and it can adversely affect their productivity.Due to this
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will be an advantage for them.
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You've successfully discussed both sides of the argument, showing a good understanding of the task.
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