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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevent.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevent.
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The modifications that will be made to the industrial area in the town of Norbiton as depicted
by
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 the given picture chart. The information is calibrated in the form of pictorial representation.
Overall
, the most striking feature of the chart is that the area of factories will undergo several changes in the coming time period and a lot of developments will be noticed. Taking a cursory glance, it can be manifested that in the upcoming
plan
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 new roads will be constructed from the
round-about
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roundabout
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to the north and north-west
direction
whereas
 all the factories will be demolished to
built
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 new houses.
Furthermore
, a new smaller
round-about
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roundabout
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 will
establish
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be established
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 below the older one and near to it the establishment of
medical
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a medical
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 centre will take place
to
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 the
south-east
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southeast
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direction
. Moving to
further
 details,
to
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 the south-west
direction
,
construction
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 of shops will occur near the bigger circular path.
However
, the one factory to the east
direction
 will be replaced by the school and near
to
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this
 school will be a playground to the north-east
direction
 for children to play.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words direction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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