In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining Quality of water and air from both industry and construction. What measures could be takenTo prevent this?
Mandy developing nations
facing
Wrong verb form
face
challenging
Replace the word
challenges
to maintain
Change preposition
in maintaining
good
Add an article
a good
quality
of
natural resources Change preposition
apply
such
as water
and air
from both industry
Change to a plural noun
industries
as well as
construction. In order
to improve the quality
,government
should spend funds Add an article
the government
in
the Change preposition
on
environment
program and Replace the word
environmental
building
factories in the right place. I will explain my points in the following paragraphs.
The first measure that Wrong verb form
build
government
should Correct article usage
the government
be taken
Wrong verb form
take
to
grow more Add a missing verb
is to
trees
around cities because due to
industralization
, many Correct your spelling
industrialization
industrialisation
trees
has
been Change the verb form
have
cutting
and Wrong verb form
cut
using
as Wrong verb form
used
a
fuel for development .Correct article usage
apply
This
rising
the depletion of Verb problem
causes
ozone
layer and Add an article
the ozone
increasing
the harmful gases in the Wrong verb form
increases
air
. These harmful gases result in bad quality
of the air
and shows
Change the verb form
show
Correct article usage
a deterimental
deterimental
impact on the human Correct your spelling
detrimental
bodies
too . Fix the agreement mistake
body
Therefore
, creating environment
programs which Replace the word
environmental
involves
planting a large Correct subject-verb agreement
involve
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
trees
in order
to give fresh air
and sufficient
amount of Correct article usage
a sufficient
oxyzen
will Correct your spelling
oxygen
definately
Correct your spelling
definitely
helps
in the Change the verb form
help
quality
of air
. For example
, when industralization
happened in Correct your spelling
industrialisation
the
china Correct article usage
apply
then
Correct your spelling
the
government
initiate
Wrong verb form
initiated
the
project Correct article usage
a
name
"planting Replace the word
named
trees
" for
improve the Change preposition
to
quality
of the air
.
Second
measure would be creating factories far from the urban area to prevent Change the article
The second
water
quality
. This
measure would help in order
to preserve fresh water
for city supply ,otherwise
, due to
industralization
, all the chemicals released in the Correct your spelling
industrialization
industrialisation
water
and
get mixed up with fresh Correct word choice
apply
water
,eventually ,major
issue in the Add an article
a major
the major
quality
of water
. Moreover
, states should implement the
policies Correct article usage
apply
in
which it clearly Change preposition
apply
shows
that no Correct subject-verb agreement
show
hamfull
waste should Correct your spelling
harmful
release
into Wrong verb form
be released
water
. Add an article
the water
For example
, the industralization
in the United Kingdom took place far from city life in Correct your spelling
industrialisation
order
to preserve fresh water
.
In conclusion, the problems of bad quality
of air
and water
is
arising Change the verb form
are
due to
development
of construction Correct article usage
the development
as well as
industries . It could be solved if government
Correct article usage
the government
spend
funds on Wrong verb form
spent
environment
Replace the word
environmental
prgrams
and Correct your spelling
programs
build
factories far from Wrong verb form
built
city
.Add an article
the city
a city
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