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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining Quality of water and air from both industry and construction. What measures could be takenTo prevent this?

#countries #quality #water #air #industry #construction #measures #takento
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Mandy developing nations
facing
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challenging
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to maintain
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in maintaining
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good
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a good
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quality
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of
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apply
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natural resources
such
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 as
water
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 and
air
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 from both
industry
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industries
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as well as
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 construction. In
order
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 to improve the
quality
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 ,
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government
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the government
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 should spend funds
in
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on
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 the
environment
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 program and
building
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 factories in the right place. I will explain my points in the following paragraphs. The first measure that
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government
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 should
be taken
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to
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 grow more
trees
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 around cities because
due to
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industralization
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industrialization
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, many
trees
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has
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 been
cutting
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 and
using
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 as
a
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fuel for development .
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rising
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 the depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer and
increasing
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 the harmful gases in the
air
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 . These harmful gases result in bad
quality
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 of the
air
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 and
shows
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a deterimental
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deterimental
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detrimental
 impact on the human
bodies
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 too .
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 , creating
environment
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 programs which
involves
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involve
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planting a large
amount
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number
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 of
trees
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 in
order
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 to give fresh
air
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 and
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of
oxyzen
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oxygen
 will
definately
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definitely
helps
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help
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 in the
quality
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 of
air
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 .
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industralization
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industrialisation
 happened in
the
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china
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then
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the
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government
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initiate
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the
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a
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 project
name
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 "planting
trees
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"
for
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to
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quality
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 of the
air
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.
Second
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 measure would be creating factories far from the urban area to prevent
water
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quality
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 .
This
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 measure would help in
order
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 to preserve fresh
water
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 for city supply ,
otherwise
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 ,
due to
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industralization
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industrialization
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, all the chemicals released in the
water
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and
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get mixed up with fresh
water
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 ,eventually ,
major
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a major
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 issue in the
quality
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 of
water
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 .
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 , states should implement
the
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policies
in
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which it clearly
shows
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 that no
hamfull
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harmful
 waste should
release
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 into
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water
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the water
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 .
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 , the
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industralization
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industrialisation
 in the United Kingdom took place far from city life in
order
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 to preserve fresh
water
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. In conclusion, the problems of bad
quality
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 of
air
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 and
water
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is
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are
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 arising
due to
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development
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the development
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 of construction
as well as
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 industries . It could be solved if
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government
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the government
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spend
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spent
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 funds on
environment
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environmental
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prgrams
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programs
 and
build
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built
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 factories far from
city
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the city
a city
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