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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The information about the modifications made to the village of Chorleywood showing development over the period of 36 years is depicted by the given chart. The information is calibrated in the form of pictorial form.
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, the most striking feature of the chart is that the village of Chorleywood underwent several developments as represented by the picture chart. Taking a cursory glance, it can be manifested that the manufacturing of the main road in the village took place
to
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 the south and east direction. Another development was the establishment of motor
way
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in 1970 but before that railway line was built in the year 1909. Moving to
further
 details, the major development was between 1868
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and
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1883 when the Chorley
park
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 and
gold course
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Gold Course
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 was introduced in the middle of the vicinity. In the next 40 years, Chorley got its
first ever
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 railway station and in the following years, more greenery was boosted on the adjacent sides of the main road to the east direction. By the end of
20th
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centuary
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century
, the next construction had been the ponds in both corners of the
right hand
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 side.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steady growth
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • industrial revolution
  • commuter village
  • demographics
  • expansion
  • residential areas
  • town planning
  • urban sprawl
  • sustainability
  • amenities
  • conservation
  • transport links
  • population density
  • zoning regulations
  • historical development
  • cultural heritage
  • economic factors
  • environmental impact
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