The pie charts show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in new zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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pie charts

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on

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the

internet

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Internet

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shopping

sales

for retail sectors from 2003 to 2013 in New Zealand.

Overall

, the

percentage

of travel

is

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the highest

sales

through online shopping in 2003,

while

after a decade film or music became the top

most

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online shopping

sales

.

To begin

with, clothes have 24% online

sales

. which is approximately one-fourth of a

quater

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quarter

in 2003, which dropped down to 16% after a span of 10 years.

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,

on

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the net shopping

sales

for books

is

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were

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the

least

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lowest

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in 2003

as

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19%,

while

the proportion slightly

increases

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increased

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to 22% by the year 2013. Apart from these, online

sales

of travel held the

top most

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topmost

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position

is

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in

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retail areas with a

percentage

of 36% in 2003,

however

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it's

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proportion

decreases

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decreased

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signifuantely

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significantly

by 29%

at the end

of

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the giver

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giver

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time period.

Lastly

, internet

sales

of film and music

is

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were

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not popular in 2003

as

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at

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21%

is

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the

percentage

of

sales

,

whereas

this

number

rises up

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in 2013

with

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a

percentage

of

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33% and

it

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becomes

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became

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the highest online shopping

sales

in the following year.