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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and by used by many food and drinks companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantae

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Plastic
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packages
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 are commonly used in the
food
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 and
drinks
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 manufacturing industry.
This
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 essay will describe both the positive and negative sides of using
plastic
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. On the one hand, the packets, which are produced from
plastic
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 can easily be used to pack any
food
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 and
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drinks
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drink
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 item.
This
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 type of packing ensures better
storing
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storage
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 of products.
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, any processed
food
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 and any soft drink can be preserved in normal temperatures for up to one year
also
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 without any problem.
Moreover
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,
Plastic
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packages
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 are more convenient to handle.
Consequently
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,
such
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 handling makes the delivery
Process
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process
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 smooth and operation friendly because of
non-fragile
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its non-fragile
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 Properties.
Finaly
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Finally
 labels can easily be inserted over packets, which helps the companies in their marketing.
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, one of the main drawbacks of
plastic
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package
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packages
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 is,
it
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that it
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 is not reusable, which is not at all
financial
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financially
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 friendly for a
company
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. As
plastic
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Packages
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 can be used only once, companies have to make new packets every time for new
Products Packing
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product packing
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.
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, a
company
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loss
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loses
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 a huge amount of money for packing only.
For instance
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, soft
drinks
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 like
Cocacola
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Coca-Cola
 and Pepsi can use
Plastic
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bottle
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bottles
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 only once and after drinking those are thrown away.
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, plastics are not disposable to
soil
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the soil
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, that makes a bad impact on
environment
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the environment
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.
consequently
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, the industry related to
food
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 and
drinks
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are
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is
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 Paying a huge penalty for
such
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packages
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, which is a direct loss
a
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apply
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for a
company
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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usage
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the usage
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 of
plastic
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 has
drawback
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drawbacks
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 lite financial loss for
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company
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the company
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.
However
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, I believe the positive sides are more like convenient packing and handling
system
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systems
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.
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Task Achievement
It's important to ensure that your introduction fully addresses the question by stating clearly if you believe the advantages do or do not outweigh the disadvantages, rather than just mentioning that both sides will be discussed. This could further strengthen your argument.
Task Achievement
In your conclusion, be sure to directly answer the question posed by reinforcing your position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. This solidifies your argument and provides closure to your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures more to enhance the flow and readability of your essay. Utilizing a mix of complex and compound sentences can demonstrate a higher level of English proficiency.
Coherence and Cohesion
Careful proofreading is essential. Small grammatical errors and spelling mistakes (e.g., 'lite' instead of 'like', 'loss a' should be 'lose a') can distract from your message. Addressing these would polish your essay and improve clarity.
Task Achievement
You did a good job providing specific examples to support your points, such as the mention of soft drinks like Coca-Cola and Pepsi. This makes your argument more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion
You structured your essay well, with clear paragraphs for the introduction, each side of the argument, and a conclusion. This organization makes your essay easy to follow.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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