tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, other claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your opinion.
Tourism
has strongly improved Use synonyms
last
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half century
. Beyond doubt, there have been many discussions revolving around the issue of whether the Add a hyphen
half-century
development
of Use synonyms
tourism
should be beneficial for the economy by some Use synonyms
people
or others think Use synonyms
this
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development
is very harmful Use synonyms
for
local Change the preposition
to
people
. In the next paragraphs, I will delve into the advantages and disadvantages of Use synonyms
tourism
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development
in their detail.
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To begin
with, one of the main advantages of Linking Words
tourism
is that the economic thriving can Use synonyms
be provide
with Change the verb form
be provided
this
. The Linking Words
development
of Use synonyms
tourism
leads to open many workplaces Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
tourism
offices, hotels, Use synonyms
destinations
, which Correct word choice
and destinations
ensuring
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ensure
the
thousands of vacations. All of them can be the level of well-being. Namely, economic Correct article usage
apply
development
will affect in turn the improving education and medical sectors. What`s more, Use synonyms
tourism
is the most significant factor Use synonyms
for
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in
recognition
of countries. Correct article usage
the recognition
That is
, some countries aim that their customs and languages are learned by foreign citizens. That`s why these can be caused Linking Words
to
their Change preposition
by
obtain
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obtaining
the
political power. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, the more Linking Words
people
, the better for them.
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In
the other hand, there are some drawbacks Change preposition
On
in
the Change preposition
to
development
of Use synonyms
tourism
. Use synonyms
It is clear that
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,
many forests and places Remove the comma
apply
destroy
for the building of Wrong verb form
are destroyed
hotel
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hotels
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tourism
destinations. Replace the word
tourist
Consequently
, all these result in many problems Linking Words
such
as Linking Words
the
climate change. Correct article usage
apply
For
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this
reason, many climate changers criticized Linking Words
this
issue in the UN for years. Linking Words
Furthermore
, Linking Words
the
one of another Correct article usage
apply
reason
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reasons
of
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for
this
drawback is Linking Words
that
difficulties local residents face. Correct determiner usage
the
That is
, the Linking Words
high
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apply
prices
policies are implemented in Fix the agreement mistake
price
touristic
Replace the word
tourist
destination
for Fix the agreement mistake
destinations
the
economic Correct article usage
apply
development
which is not suit for local Use synonyms
people
. Use synonyms
For
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this
reason, they Linking Words
complaint
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complain
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this
situation and Change preposition
about this
against
these policies.
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are against
To sum up
, the benefits of Linking Words
tourism
Use synonyms
development
are more related to Use synonyms
the
economic Correct article usage
apply
development
which Use synonyms
provide
well-being, and opportunities for countries to spread their culture. Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
In contrast
, the drawbacks of Linking Words
tourism
Use synonyms
development
involve some problems Use synonyms
such
as destroying natural places and the high costs for local Linking Words
people
.Use synonyms
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a clear structure by having distinct paragraphs for introduction, body (advantages and disadvantages), and conclusion. You've done this well but further clarity can be achieved by more explicit transitions and summaries.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop your main points more fully with specific examples or evidence for stronger support. While you mentioned several impacts of tourism, including examples or data would make your arguments more convincing.
Task Achievement
Try to maintain a more formal and consistent tone throughout your essay. Avoid using contractions (That's, What's) and informal phrases to maintain academic formality.
Task Achievement
Clarify your personal position more explicitly in your conclusion. While you summarized the advantages and disadvantages well, explicitly stating your own view in relation to these will strengthen the task achievement.
Task Achievement
You have effectively outlined the broad advantages and disadvantages of tourism, addressing the economic and environmental perspectives.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay structure, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, provides a good foundation for presenting your argument.