The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. USA,France, malaysia, Brazil and Egypt

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. USA,France, malaysia, Brazil and Egypt
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The
diagarm
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diagram
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illustrate
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the number of global
traveler
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travelers
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went
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who went
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to
those country
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that country
those countries
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including
USA
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,
France
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, Malaysia, Brazil,
Egypt
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and Egypt
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from 1995 to 2010.
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, there
were
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experienced
increase
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trend over a period of 15 years.
According to
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line
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charts, it can be seen that
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USA
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the USA
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was the most popular place in 1995.
However
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, the tourist travel to
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USA
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the USA
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only showed
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a slight
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increase after 2000
while
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people took a trip to
France
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were getting more and more higher. it is noticeable that
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only approximately 30% of
holidaymaker
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holidaymakers
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went to
France
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in 1995,
this
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figure experienced
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a dramatic
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rise 5 years later. it showed gradual
grow
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growth
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after 2000 and
then
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it reached its peak at 90 million in 2010 which was
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the same
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as
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USA
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the USA
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. Based on the data provided,
compare
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compared
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to
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the others
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others
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other
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three countries, there
were
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was
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no significant increase from 1995 to 2010
To sum up
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,
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USA
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the USA
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and
France
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still are popular
area
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areas
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people
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for people
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who want to visit.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • International tourist arrivals
  • Trends
  • Highlighting
  • Analysing
  • Potential factors
  • Growth patterns
  • Declines
  • Driving those changes
  • Influenced
  • External factors
  • Global economic conditions
  • Health crises
  • Government policies
  • Visa regulations
  • Tourism promotion efforts
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