Nowadays, some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience or personal qualities when they look for new employees. Why is it the case? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years,some argue that a formal academic qualification owns the higher state when they recruit
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new staff.In my opinion,I completely disagree with
this
point of view and I believe that
life
experience
and personal
qualities
are more important which can be supported by the reasons as follows. First and foremost,
as
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a candidate,
they
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often
coming
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from different
University
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or
college
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,and often learn a string of professional skills
as well as
knowledge in various departments.It is hard to definite whether one of them is excellent.The best way is to ask or investigate their
life
or work
experience
,
thus
,can tell if they are suited for the company or even bring huge financial potential to the team.
Secondly
,as an employer, it is undeniable that they can pick up anyone they want or just based on academic qualifications.
However
, you can never know the ability of participants,which could
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a huge disaster for your organization.
For example
, a student or a postgraduate has a hard communicate skills and can even not cooperate with his colleagues,which would cause stagnant in whole the working procedure.
Therefore
,
life
experience
is very important for
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staff.
On the other hand
, personal
qualities
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ultimate importance,
also
. it is obvious that bad personal
qualities
may have a potential impact on the company.
For instance
,a staff's dishonour would influent not only themselves, but
also
the whole team or even the whole company's fame.In
this
regard, we should make good use of the chance of recruiting
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and
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to get in touch with each other to realise its value. with all the points above,the conclusion can be made that
life
or career
experience
and personal
qualities
are important to the employer.
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