The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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depicts the percentage
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men
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and women
staff
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across the
faculty
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in a University in 2012. To overview, male
staff
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placed at the highest in engineering
faculty
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while
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female
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females
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took it on education. In the beginning, in
Engineering
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the Engineering
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faculty
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men
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male
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staff
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was highest which
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85% and
on
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in
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the same
field
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female
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females
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showed 18% which was
lowest
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the lowest
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in
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female
staff
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.
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, on education it showed
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oposite
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opposite
and
that is
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in
this
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department women
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were 72% and
men
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are
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25%.
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, 62%
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of male
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male
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males
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worked
on
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in
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the busniess
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busniess
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business
and science
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which was
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the second
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highest and 42% of
male
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males
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worked
on
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in
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arts
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the arts
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department which was
second
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the second
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lowest rate.
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, 58%
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of women
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women
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women's
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staff
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add
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added
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on
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to
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the arts
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and 50%
on
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medicine
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the medicine
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department
while
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49%
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men
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men's
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staff
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also
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add
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here which was slightly equal to
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the female
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staff
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, staff, faculty with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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