The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.
The pie charts
depicts
the percentage of using different gadgets in Canada by Change the verb form
depict
age
of 18 to 25 in 2009 and 2019.
To overview, conventional Correct article usage
the age
tv
used
in 2009 mostly Add a missing verb
was used
while
in 2019 it used a few percentages which is the lowest and flat screen tv
replaced it.
In the beginning, in 2009, only 5% Correct your spelling
TV
Change preposition
of tablet
tablet
used by Fix the agreement mistake
tablets
the
people who are between 18 to 25 ages but in 2019 it increased and reached 19%. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, flat-screen tv
user
Fix the agreement mistake
users
also
rise
up from 8% to 27% and from 15% the mobile phone Wrong verb form
rose
used
was 26% in 2019.
Replace the word
use
On the other hand
, conventional tv
, laptop and desktop Correct your spelling
TV
used
gradually decreased from 2009 to 2019 Replace the word
use
on
Canada. Conventional Change preposition
in
tv
users dramatically step
down in 2019 which was from 34% to 4% . Wrong verb form
stepped
However
, desktop and laptop used
Replace the word
use
also
decreased in this
year and reached 12% from 18% and 12%.Submitted by tanakchakma55 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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