The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.
The pie charts
depicts
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the percentage of using different gadgets in Canada by
age
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the age
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of 18 to 25 in 2009 and 2019. To overview, conventional
tv
used
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in 2009 mostly
while
in 2019 it used a few percentages which is the lowest and flat screen
tv
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replaced it. In the beginning, in 2009, only 5%
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of tablet
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tablet
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used by
the
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people who are between 18 to 25 ages but in 2019 it increased and reached 19%.
Furthermore
, flat-screen
tv
user
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also
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up from 8% to 27% and from 15% the mobile phone
used
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was 26% in 2019.
On the other hand
, conventional
tv
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TV
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, laptop and desktop
used
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gradually decreased from 2009 to 2019
on
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Canada. Conventional
tv
users dramatically
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down in 2019 which was from 34% to 4% .
However
, desktop and laptop
used
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also
decreased in
this
year and reached 12% from 18% and 12%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • gadgets
  • utilized
  • age categories
  • watching TV channels
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • notable trends
  • increase/decrease
  • devices
  • decade
  • advancements in technology
  • user preferences
  • speculation
  • future trends
  • conclusion
  • implications
  • technology and media companies
  • lifestyle
  • habits
  • target age group
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